Acworth Thread part 2

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No problem, if anybody can arrange it then Mary can

 

[JONATHAN P ACWORTH]

tell her thanks all hell and i buy curb a pint!

 

[JONATHAN P ACWORTH]

dont forget tell curb my books comming out worth buying!

 

[IA]

tell her thanks all hell and i buy curb a pint!

I'm sure she'll be happy to help you out

But I think she wants a signed copy of your book

 

[SuperChrissyisfantasticPardswasatrocious]

If it helps JA, I am near enough 100% certain that curbs knows you by name .

 

[calydon_road]

i hoped this moniker would catch on...nice one lads.

 

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Mary has made new demands Jon, she wants to be on your TV show before asking Curbs that's women for you, always demanding stuff!

 

[JONATHAN P ACWORTH]

ALL hell what if mary comes along to the event with curb im sure he be up for it

 

[Glovepup]

ALL hell what if mary comes along to the event with curb im sure he be up for it

Now now, none of that dirty talk on here please.....

 

[JONATHAN P ACWORTH]

paul as a guest on my show ----like evett does with celebrity ghost hunting could work couldnt it!

 

[cafc4ever]

Ja, as a published author, can i have your opinion on my latest effort?

http://tattooedfootball.com/?p=714

 

[JONATHAN P ACWORTH]

well done!

 

[cafc4ever]

You like it ja?

 

[Glovepup]

paul as a guest on my show ----like evett does with celebrity ghost hunting could work couldnt it!

Yes I know, I was messin

 

[JONATHAN P ACWORTH]

yes its ok so thumbs up

 

[cafc4ever]

A thumbs up from ja and Bwp! I am on a roll!

 

[JONATHAN P ACWORTH]

please cp no jason euell tom pls rather have smith and silva up front

 

[calydon_road]

i like the article, it conveys your enthusiasm.

stylistically, you should try and stay in the same tense. you move a lot between present and past and it becomes rather messy.

also, your opening paragraph is rather strange...as you talk of a week being a long time in politics, but then use a year as the time period for comparison. therefore the metaphor doesnt really work as it should.

overall, its good and with a bit more tightness on form and style, it will be excellent

 

[SuperChrissyisfantasticPardswasatrocious]

i like the article, it conveys your enthusiasm.

stylistically, you should try and stay in the same tense. you move a lot between present and past and it becomes rather messy.

also, your opening paragraph is rather strange...as you talk of a week being a long time in politics, but then use a year as the time period for comparison. therefore the metaphor doesnt really work as it should.

overall, its good and with a bit more tightness on form and style, it will be excellent

So you give him a C-?

 

[JONATHAN P ACWORTH]

come on board name the covered end after curb u know it makes sence