Landed in Edinburgh yesterday and what was the first magazine I saw? Yep, scan magazine. Keep up the good work big scan.
Comments : 1. This is like an actual proper poem. Really good stuff. 2. Suggest changing "be" in line 3 to "being" 3. Don't understand lines 9-12. Suggest revisit. 4. The final line's crap.
I really like it, G. The essence of poetry, like all art, is to not think too much about structure and phrasing; what comes from within must be recognised and appreciated for its nakedness, its natural form, even its flaws. To tinker and reconstruct will no doubt distract from the original flow and feeling, and this amounts to nothing more than artistic destruction. The great artists, poets, musicians et al do little to hone and tweak their new-born creations, for why should they? Art is freedom and expression, not rules and stipulations better suited to works of an academic nature. Keep it going and please allow me to read through your creations as they naturally occur. I don't normally publish my 'serious' poetry on forums (you'd discover my true identity), but I may just do so later today.
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