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Discussion in 'Southampton' started by ChapelSaint07, Mar 21, 2012.

  1. ChapelSaint07

    ChapelSaint07 Member

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    My ten year old brother came home form school today and handed me a poem. I thought for a bit and then decided to read it. When I had finished, I was very impressed. He told the teacher didn't know who Rickie was, so he wrote this for him:

    Rickie Lambert,
    Scoring,
    Wembley.

    Goal machine,
    Team player,
    Genius.

    Red and white,
    Champions.

    And I,
    Cheering him on.

    Rickie Lambert,
    Legend.

    I know this may not be post of the day but it's Saints related and, I think, very very good for a 10 year-old. Only tweaked some spelling.

    Chapel
     
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  2. lamby

    lamby Needs a cold shower

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    Glad to see he's starting young!
     
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  3. fran-MLs little camera

    fran-MLs little camera Well-Known Member

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    Obviously the lad's being brought up properly.
     
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  4. OddRiverOakWizards

    OddRiverOakWizards Well-Known Member

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    Can we do a haiku too?
     
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  5. SaintsFanAlex

    SaintsFanAlex Active Member

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    Hope your going to treat him after that bravo! :)
     
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  6. TheNorthLondonSaint

    TheNorthLondonSaint New Member

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    How is that good?
    He's 10 years old for **** sake, he doesn't have down syndrome
    if he does have down syndrome then thats actually quite an accomplishment
     
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  7. ChapelSaint07

    ChapelSaint07 Member

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    He doesn't have downs syndrome, and like I said, it wouldn't be to everyones taste.
     
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  8. Qwerty

    Qwerty Well-Known Member

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    Only if it's about Tadanari.
     
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  9. SaintsForTheWin

    SaintsForTheWin Any holes a goal

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    No comment, but I'm illiterate.
     
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  10. The Ides of March

    The Ides of March Well-Known Member

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    Well it's better than many of the mindless chants that come out of the mouths of adults!! eg PUP, PPU or the anti-Pompey songs emanating from the Northam and Kingsland for a considerable portion of many a home game. FFS we must have better things to sing about than Pompey's predicament.
     
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  11. ImpSaint

    ImpSaint Well-Known Member

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    Go back to the 'learn about being sensitive' school. Then get back to the general chat forum.
     
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  12. terrypaine

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    Eat your heart out Philip Larkin. I must say chapel, you might give your bruvver some guidance on coherence.
     
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  13. TheSecondStain

    TheSecondStain Needs an early night

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    Rickie Lambert,
    Scoring,
    Wembley.

    Goal machine,
    Team player,
    Genius.

    Red and white,
    Champions.

    And I,
    Cheering him on.

    Rickie Lambert,
    Legend.


    I read this soon after it was first posted, and tbh, I didn't get the swing of it at all. I've read it several more times since and honestly I think it is very good indeed. I see that it has been written with a bit of a beat to it. It could be chanted, performance poet wise, for example. It is composed from the very words used in football, and has that modern text-talk like quality about it. Actually, the more I read into it, the more I appreciate it. !0 years of age..? Very, very good indeed.

    I'd like to copy that into a Notepad textfile, as a reminder of the season, if I may.
     
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  14. pass the football

    pass the football Well-Known Member

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    I wouldn't have guessed it was by a ten year-old! Don't know how anyone can seriously criticise it.
     
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  15. ImpSaint

    ImpSaint Well-Known Member

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    Exactly Second Stain. The whole poem can be narrated to a beat.

    however some people cannot see things like this. If Art is not a photo quality replication or if poetry doesn't rhyme they have no clue at all. I'll draw the line at stuffed sheep and unmade beds though ;)
     
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  16. fatletiss

    fatletiss Well-Known Member

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    I don't like to lower myself to some people's levels, but you are something of a tube. Last summer we had to put up with your racism and now your petty child insults.

    Just stay off the forum.
     
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  17. fatletiss

    fatletiss Well-Known Member

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    Chapel Saint, that's a grand effort. My son is 10 and a bit of a numeracy geek at school; I'd love him to spend that much time and thought on literacy.

    Get him to hand write it out and send it to the club, marked FAO Ricky Lambert. He'll love it.
     
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    milton archer Well-Known Member

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    Chapel Saint, I think its good....encourage him to keep writing
     
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  19. KingslandKate

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    I wouldn't have guessed that was from a 10yo! It sounds quite mature and well thought out.
     
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  20. Channonfodder

    Channonfodder Rebel without a clue.....

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    When a ten year old child shows this to someone older, he is looking for encouragement and deserves it. I am no literary critic, but I think it's great that your brother chose to show it to you. A few positive words can boost children's self-esteem and happiness. Thanks for sharing this.
    Sadly, there are a few who obviously did not get this encouragement as children and the bitterness and self-loathing is all too obvious when reading their "poetry."

    Oh, and will this encourage our own wordsmith, Terry Paine, to pen another mighty tome? I seem to remember he was pretty good at it.
     
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